Time for me to introduce you to a form of Japanese poetry that was new to me, until BillyBuc at Artistry with Words mentioned it in a recent post. Thanks, Billy, and I’m sure you won’t mind if I quote you here:-)
Dodoitsu is a Japanese poetic form where the focus is on syllables instead of rhyme or meter. Dodoitsu is a four-line poem which has seven syllables in each of the first three lines, and five syllables in the final line. Traditionally, the Dodoitsu focuses on work or love, and it usually has a humorous twist.
So here you are, my first attempt at writing something in a Japanese poetic form other than haiku and tanka (though my US cousins might prefer to replace the word “moulded” with “molded”) …
Through the window, a rainbow
she is desperate to share.
Moulded in cushion comfort,
he prefers his tea.
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Well thank you for the mention and I love your response to the “challenge.” Well done, Sarah!
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I’m glad you approve, Billy, and am so pleased that you introduced me to Dodoitsu, as it has so much potential for fun. Watch this space. There will now be an ongoing series of Dodoitsu, to go with my haiku and tanka series.
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I’m actually considering trying it myself, and I don’t even write poetry. LOL
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Brilliant. I look forward to reading it 🙂 You might also like to try a tanka poem. If you type the word “tanka” into Search on my blog, you’ll find lots of examples, but here’s my guide to this particular Japanese poetic form https://sarahpotterwrites.com/2012/12/07/tanka-3-a-brief-guide-to-the-31-syllable-poetic-form/
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Ah, this is great! I love Japanese poetry. It just tugs at the boundaries of things – so many facets that emerge from between the short lines. Well done!
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Thank you. I’m so glad you like it 🙂
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Nice job. Could never tell it was your first attempt. Always nice to meet an eccentric Brit. 😀 Eccentrics are my favorite people. I’ve often referred to myself as an oxymoron … a down-to-earth, eccentric. 🙂
Thank you for stopping by my blog and nominating my book, Sarah.
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Thank you, Lori, my fellow eccentric! And it was a pleasure nominating your book. Am keeping my fingers tightly crossed for you 🙂
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Well done for trying a new poetic form Sarah and you definitely got the humour in there 🙂
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Thank you, Andrea 🙂 I was trying to stay true to the subtle and lightly playful humour that the Japanese often portray in their poetry 🙂
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Wonderfully done, and a new form to me! I enjoy the forms that suggest a theme as I so often have no idea what I’m writing about. 🙂
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Thank you, Sunshine 🙂 Those moments when you’ve no idea what you’re writing about are probably ones where the literary Muse has 100% control over you. I love it when that happens, as everything written is a surprise to the author, so that when she reads it through she’s quite mystified as to the source of all those words! Keep at it. I love your writing 🙂
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