once crowned with a star
it glittered in the firelight
last year’s Christmas tree
dumped forgotten and homeless
its chocolate coins melted
Anyone else out there with a seasonal tanka in them, bursting to get out, if only they understood a little more about this poetic form?
Here are the absolute basics: a tanka is a five-line poem of 31 syllables shared 5-7-5-7-7, so it’s just a longer version of a haiku, which is three lines of 17 syllables shared 5-7-5. Lines 1 and 2 of the tanka usually represent a moment or thought in concrete terms. Line 3 is the pivot. Lines 4 and 5 are your reflection upon that moment or thought.
Sometimes I punctuate my tanka, but the one above called for me to leave it as bare and unadorned as the dead and abandoned tree. There is no hard and fast rule about punctuation.
For more on writing tanka, have a look at http://www.tankaonline.com/Quick%20Start%20Guide.htm
There’s also a comprehensive history of tanka at http://www.tankaonline.com/About%20Tanka%20and%20Its%20History.htm
Looking forward to seeing your compositions, and please do paste a link to them as a “comment” to this post.
And now for something completely unrelated to this post — today I received this message from WordPress:
You registered on WordPress.com 1 years ago!
Thanks for flying with us. Keep up the good blogging!
AND WHAT A YEAR IT HAS BEEN!
A GREAT BIG HUG AND THANK YOU TO ALL MY WONDERFUL BLOGGING FRIENDS 🙂
6 thoughts on “Tanka #3: a brief guide to the 31-syllable poetic form”
I’ve never been good at poems with actual form to them – think I’m a bit lazy to do all the thinking involved – it does not come naturally.
Free verse though, that I can do 😉
Your poem was quite lovely Sarah – not many things quite as sad as an abandoned and dead Christmas tree – such a poignant reminder that everything’s eventual…
Free verse is good–the way it flows without constraint. My problem with writing it, is that it fast evolves into stream of consciousness prose and ceases to be a poem at all.
I’m glad you liked my tanka. That Christmas tree quite upset me when I first saw it last summer, abandoned out the back of someone’s garden. It insisted I wrote about its plight.
Happy anniversary, Sarah! I have so enjoyed your poetry, your beautiful blog that has made me smile, and made me think.
Thank you, Naomi. You’re so sweet 🙂