Sarah Potter Writes

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Friday Fictioneers — Uncle Bogeyman


“If you don’t behave yourself, the bogeyman will come and get you.”

Toby sat up in his bed hugging his knees, his back pressed to the headboard. The only comfort was his old bear, pressed against his belly, out of sight behind his legs’ defensive drawbridge. “Bogeyman? No.”

“He’s outside, lurking in the shadows, hungry for you. Move over now. Let your uncle in for a hug.”

Uncle Rob’s ragged breath stinks of old rugs and tobacco. He tugs at the drawbridge with pudgy hot hands. “Shush! Stop blubbering. This is our secret. I’ll call the bogeyman if you tell.”


Friday Fictioneers: 100 word stories
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38 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers — Uncle Bogeyman

  1. Dale on said:

    I so feared he was “that” uncle…
    Well done, Sarah.

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  2. Dear Sarah,

    Toby has better chances with the Bogeyman. This evoked so many feelings, not the least of which is anger. So well done.



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    • Dear Rochelle,
      I think you’re right. At least the Bogeyman is meant to be evil, but not so a family member, whom a child should be able to trust. Abuse of this kind makes my blood boil. There are some things in life that seem beyond forgiveness, and this is one of them.
      All best wishes,

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  3. A very uncomfortable story, so well written

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  4. Now you’re writing like me. LOL My wife says I write “dark” too well. I think she’s worried about me. 🙂 Well done, Sarah, and Happy New Year to you.

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    • When I was in my 20s, I showed some of my poems to a boyfriend’s mother. Before she read them, she’d liked me. After she’d read them, she was really worried about the mental state of someone who could write such dark things D: I’m a great fan of Nordic Noir and we all know how dark that is! Happy New Year to you, too, Billy 🙂


  5. Ewwww! Very disturbing, but well done!

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  6. Dark, sad and angry Sarah, of course there are far worse bogeymen inside.

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  7. If only the bear could be made real. I would applaud a well placed dismembering.
    Ugh, I hate the real predictors.

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  8. Better to take his chances with the real bogeyman. Good one, Sarah.

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  9. his legs’ defensive drawbridge

    Wow! this line says so much but the reader certainly doesn’t get it til the end. So very well done.

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  10. EEEWWWW! Creepy, creepy. I’m with Sandra … better to fall into the bogeyman’s hands.

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  11. Ugh I feel totally grossed out. Well done to you for doing that.

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  12. The writing is just right for such a sensitive subject and stirs all the right emotions. Nicely done.

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  13. I hope the bogeyman will come for uncle Rob.. I think he will at one point, but alas too late for Toby.

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  14. A very dark, powerful and yet sad story.

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  15. michael1148humphris on said:

    This was a fine piece of writing. When a story wants to be told it has to be written


  16. It’s every kid’s nightmare…the bogeyman. LOL. But great descriptions and visual cues here! 🙂

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    • Thank you. Indeed, I remember going through a spell as a child, when I checked under my bed and in all my cupboards before going to bed each night in case there was a bogeyman lurking there! D:


  17. I wish these were a myth, and the bogeyman can live.

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  18. he was the bogeyman! I do get that you felt uncomfortable. It’s a difficult subject but this sounds like it could be an excerpt for a full story!! ( Pardon my perpetual being behind ness. I am constantly catching up these days) Loved loved Dessication and will write a review soon.

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    • A full story … I’m not sure if I could bear to write anything longer. It would depress me too much, and researching it would be liking walking through a minefield.
      Perpetual being behindness has been the story of my life in 2016 and threatening to continue through 2017, unless I get a bit bloody minded, plus, find something magical called “energy”.
      Cybele, I’m thrilled that you loved Desiccation. A review would be fabulous. Thank you. It would really cheer me up, hugely 🙂
      Wishing you a peaceful, happy, and productive 2017

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