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Friday Fictioneers — Beyond Comprehension

Oooo, how exciting! I’ve just discovered that the photo prompt for Friday Fictioneers this week is one of my pictures πŸ™‚ That being the case, I had better get cracking with posting my 100-word contribution to the weekly blog challenge hosted by the grand lady in purple, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.

The shoes, by the way, were discovered lurking under my son’s bed during a recent tidy-up, but it was with his agreement that I photographed these cobweb-strewn antiquities and sent Rochelle a copy of the picture.

For my literary contribution, I’ve adapted an excerpt from my 1960’s crossover young-adult science fantasy novel Desiccation, the first draft of whichΒ I wrote a couple of decades ago but indie-published in 2015. As you will see from the excerpt, the creatures in question are not arachnids but crustaceans, although doubtless there are some husks of the latter hidden among those spiderwebs in my son’s old shoes. Β  Β  Β  Β  Β Β 

BEYOND COMPREHENSION

The polished black crustaceans retreated. They crawled out of the door into the night or scuttled up the walls and out through the broken windows, leaving behind a tangle of humans, many of whom had been out of sight inside the minds of other humans for various lengths of time. Some were limp, bedraggled, and lifeless as rag dolls; others were crazy as demon-possessed Jack o’-lanterns. It was science turned on its head a million times over: a total impossibility akin to squeezing size fourteen feet into size two shoes, succeeding, and then returning them to non-mangled size fourteens again.

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63 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers — Beyond Comprehension

  1. I’m not quite sure I understood exactly what the crustaceans had done – nor do I think I want to know exactly what they have done. It sounds gruesome!

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  2. Dear Sarah,

    I remember this stage of the story. What a relief it was when these creatures were set free. A wild read indeed and a good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. The polished black crustaceans retreated – this line makes everything that comes after all that more unsettling. Like Iain, I’m not sure I want to know what happened.

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  4. I feel that even if the black crustaceans retreated they have left something behind… now I think I will blame you for my nightmares to come.

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  5. I’m so glad I didn’t read this close to bedtime. 😯

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  6. Thanks for the prompt and the tale.
    Tracey

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  7. Oh I do want to know what happened. I don’t just want. I need to and i am going to xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

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  8. michael1148humphris on said:

    Those crustaceans have a lot to answer for. πŸ™‚

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  9. Very dark tale.

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  10. Those shoes should be donated to the Smithsonian! They must have some historical significance and value. πŸ™‚ As for your fiction, fun as always, my friend.

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    • Lol, I’m sure there are many museums that would love those shoes, although I was wondering if the Tate Modern gallery would like them as a standalone art installation (no apologies for the pun!).

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  11. I was trying to read this, pretending I knew nothing of the story…
    I can understand the comments above πŸ˜‰
    Love how you adapted your excerpt!

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    • Thanks, Dale. I mention shoes in all my novels, but somehow my son’s dust-buckets fitted the picture, especially as I mentioned Size 14 in honour of him!

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      • Seriously… my youngest is a size 13…since the age of 13!

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      • I guess we’ve fed them too well! I blame it on the large amounts of extra mature cheddar cheese my son eats, which has made his bones grow exceptionally well, but thank goodness his feet don’t smell the same as his favourite food.

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      • Well that is not the case with mine. Picky on the veg, loves all meats and fish and junk food and sadly the odour from those puppies is killer…. though less now than a few years ago !

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      • Smelly feet can be linked to Zinc deficiency, a mineral that men are more likely to lack, especially young men (I’ll not go into the medical reasons here, but I’m sure you can guess why, if you don’t know already!).

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      • There you go. And the other one wears construction boots and has become one with feet so foul. Refuses to use any product such as “odor eaters”… so gross

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      • You need to burn Joss incense sticks in your house! That’s probably why hippies liked them, to cover up body odours, as personal hygiene wasn’t always that high on their agenda D:

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      • LMAO!

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  12. The polished black crustaceans will stay in my mind all day. And maybe all night too. Good one, and a terrific photo, Sarah.

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  13. Great photo prompts Sarah. You are so brave looking and your son’s bed I would never dare!

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  14. Clever how you adapted an excerpt from your novel to a flash. Lovely prompt too. Thank you. Thank your son. So brave!

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    • Thank you, Kelvin. My son loves this particular novel of mine, so the least I could do was adapt an excerpt from it, in response to the cobwebby “artifacts” under his bed. He writes, too, so perhaps those shoes will trigger an idea for his next piece of dark fantasy!

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  15. Never trust a crustacean. Very nicely done.

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  16. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover on said:

    What a great first line. It sets the scene and puts the reader on edge right of the bat.

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  17. What a great photo, who knows what is lurking in those shoes – I remember this part of Desiccation well – a very creepy vision…

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  18. Those first few words grabbed me! A dark tale indeed.

    Click to read my FriFic!

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  19. The polished black crustaceans are going to stay in my memory tonight. Intriguing story and thanks for the prompt.

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  20. Interesting excerpt, Sarah. And I loved the prompt. I’m glad you photographed those shoes.

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  21. Great prompt! These shoes definitely go with your creepy crawly crustaceans! Creepy story!

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  22. Your book must be a stunner!

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  23. Agggh! That doesn’t sound like any kind of world I’d want to live in. I had to read it a couple of times to put all the details together. Really good.

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    • I like to describe the novel, from which this story excerpt comes, as “St Trinian’s meets Invasion of the Body Snatchers”. It’s my take on 1960’s style B-movies! I’m glad you thought the excerpt really good, despite your Agggh!

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  24. oh I love your style and craziness! ( I’ve been absent for a bit and trying to catch up)

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