Sarah Potter Writes

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Friday Fictioneers — Ascended

PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Genre: Metaphysical Fiction
Word count: 100


Up above those clouds, way beyond the sun, live a choir of angels. That’s what my brother says anyway.

“Sis, can you hear that heavenly music?” he asks, whenever we’re outdoors, away from unbelievers.

I’ll close my eyes and strain my ears but hear nothing other than cars, planes, and people (plus birds, if I’m lucky).

He’ll say, “Don’t try to shut out the sound. Concentrate on it. Let it wash over you. Then you will hear the angels in the silence beyond the noise.”

I’m so jealous of my brother’s ability. If only I could hear Mum singing, too.


Photo Prompt: copyright © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

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50 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers — Ascended

  1. Dear Sarah,

    Your genre tag has be thinking the brother really is hearing the angels and mum singing. At any rate, the conversation between the two is tender and the backstory is shining behind the clouds. Well done.



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    • Dear Rochelle,
      Thank you. It’s an extra beautiful photo this week and prompted me straight off to think of angels and heavenly things.
      I have two real-life tales to tell you about angels. Have I ever mentioned to you an encounter with a dog-whispering angel, or the dream about angels that may or may not have involved me levitating?
      Hah! I’m not going mad, I don’t think. There are some things that defy explanation in life.
      All best wishes,

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  2. Beautiful photo…I can see why it made you think of angels Sarah. Your lovely story moved me, thinking of the little boy hearing the angels singing and wanting so much for his sister to hear the same. And bringing in thoughts of Mum at the end leaves me wondering what happened….feeling both sad and intrigued…xxxx

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  3. I always know I can count on your creativity on Fridays, and somehow that is comforting. Well done my talented friend, and Happy Weekend to you!

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    • Thank you, Bill 🙂 I don’t always manage to come up with something on Fridays if that old demon Writer’s Block plays havoc with my brain, or the time-gobbling monster has eaten up all my spare hours. You have a happy weekend, too, my also talented friend!


  4. Dale on said:

    That was wonderful, Sarah! If only we all could hear….

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  5. Lovely:) I hope she’ll hear it in the end…

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  6. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover on said:

    From someone who also has her feet firmly planted on the ground, I too wish I could hear angels beyond all the daily noise.

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  7. I thought of angels and heavenly things too, but you’d never know it to read my post. In fact, I don’t know where my head went. Probably in the clouds.

    I really loved your story, Sarah. I believe the singing is there. My Mom was usually slightly off key. She should be pretty easy to pick up. 🙂

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    • Hah! I certainly wouldn’t know that you thought of angels and heavenly things, to read your post, but it did make me laugh 😀
      I’m glad you loved my story. My mum sings off key, too, but for some reason this works very well with the song “I’m Just A Gal Who Can’t Say No”. I’m not sure what the angels will think of that song one day, although she is still going strong and is in good voice with her feet firmly planted on terra firma.


  8. Very emotive, it reminded me of The Whole of the Moon by the Waterboys and the line, “I saw the crescent, you saw the whole of the moon.”

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  9. That’s lovely.

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  10. Then you will hear the angels in the silence beyond the noise – gorgeous line. My sisters and I see our parents in dragonflies and hummingbirds. Your story is a nice reminder of that.

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  11. michael1148humphris on said:

    If only everyone could hear angels …

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  12. I hope the sister learns to find a connection to her mom in her own way, whatever that may be.

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  13. The final line made it so much more emotive… love the voice of a child..

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  14. I’m with Bjorn, the last line made me choke a bit. Her longing is so real.

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  15. Such a sweet and tender story, and what a great comfort for a child.

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    • Thank you. Fortunately, some children have some amazing survival strategies to see them through grief, but I’m extra sad for those who don’t. I’m sure that a good imagination helps … although I like to think that the boy in my story really can hear angels 🙂

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  16. A sweet, sad story Sarah, the belief of the boy and the longing of the girl to be able to hear it.

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  17. Wow! Angels… A lovely thought.. Do you think she will be able to hear them? Do you want her to?

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  18. This was very touching. Maybe she will find a different way…

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  19. What a sad story. Very well-written!

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