Summer breeze catches
party balloons on a gate:
a hint of thunder.
Sticky kids crammed in marquee
with one useless magician.
Thanks 🙂 I thought to follow your example of a little piece mentioning sticky children at parties. As you can see, this is my very first tanka.
I am impressed. I assume you know there is a tradition of following on by another monk writing another haiku?
I don’t know about this thing about monks. Do tell me more.
Wonderful, as always, Sarah!
Thank you, Naomi. You are very kind 🙂
Sweet and visual. Nice write.
Thank you 🙂
Yes! Though not completely useless for he can make smiles disappear with but a wave of his magic wand, fashioned from the finest underarm hair.
I guess under such circumstances, there’ll be the holding of noses, too, as the wizard’s wand probably whiffs a little 😉
Thank you, Francina 🙂
oh THAT is clever! ..though the picture makes it more obvious…I don’t know much about tanka but this is…magic! The useless magician with his magic wand…the storm brewing…
The middle line of a tanka is meant to act as a pivot between the first two lines and the last two — hence the thunder. I think this form encourages playfulness.
Yes – but you set the bar too high…bit of a challenge!
It’s possibly one of occasions when the writer knows what she’s thinking, but to others she’s being abstruse. I’ve just penned another tanka, having been inspired by something I found moving this morning. I’ll post it soon, but as for whether I’ve lowered the bar enough, we’ll see!
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Writes quirky novels, speculative flash fiction, haiku and tanka. Nature lover. Novice photographer. Allotment freak. Mezzo soprano. British eccentric.
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