Sarah Potter Writes

Pursued by the Muses of prose, poetry, and music.

Friday Fictioneers — Wish No More

ยฉ Copyright - Rachel Bjerke

Consumed by slime and locked in haze, the forest wore a visage of enchantment. A once-loved spot in dank despair.

The odd array of outbuildings stared, open-mouthed and blank-eyed like a creature forever stunned. Not a peep from the birds, not an animal brave enough to show its whiskers. Even those of lightest claw or paw feared how the waterlogged leaves squidged underfoot and threatened to drag them under.

Then there was the wishing well, its waters a phosphorescent green, unmoving but for the coins tinkling in its depths; or was it the shifting of tiny bones? A child lost.

#

Friday Fictioneers: 100 words stories
Photo Prompt: image ยฉ โ€“ Rachel Bjerke

Single Post Navigation

31 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers — Wish No More

  1. Dear Saarah,

    You packed so much into this story. It sounds an accursed spot and one most would avoid if they could. Thank you for taking me there.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    Liked by 1 person

  2. Dear Sarah,

    You’ve taken me to a place of enchantment with vivid and lilting descriptions. I’m haunted by the lonely feel of this and the loss of a child. Beautifully written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Liked by 1 person

    • Dear Rochelle,
      Immediately I saw Rachel’s amazing picture, it struck me to the core — the way it oozed loneliness.
      Thank you, so much, for your kind words about my writing.
      All best wishes
      Sarah

      Like

  3. Wow! Your short story had me shuddering. Wonderful description of this sad and tragic place.

    Liked by 1 person

  4. Fabulous. I love how one picture can “draw” so many images in words! Love this.

    Liked by 1 person

  5. Beautifully done, each word carefully chosen. Well done.

    Liked by 1 person

  6. Oooh, spooky, but in a good way. Your word choices are excellent… Beautiful writing!

    Liked by 1 person

  7. Crazy beautiful stuff from first to last of those well-chosen words.

    Liked by 1 person

  8. You painted and wove a desolate place where no human or animal wants to go, then to find the resting place of a child’s bones. Eerie and sad. Excellent writing!

    Liked by 1 person

  9. Oh I the image of the bones in the well.. I think we saw a similar story here.. There is a haunting beauty in the image.

    Liked by 1 person

    • The chances of 2 people out of 106 writing similar stories from the same picture prompt is moderately high. Anyway, I promise you it’s coincidence, as I’ve not read the other person’s story. We obviously just saw the same haunting quality in the image.

      Liked by 1 person

  10. The loss of the child… wow, that piece held such power in a small amount of words, Sarah!

    Liked by 1 person

    • Thank you, so much, Christy ๐Ÿ™‚ I think that flash fiction is a wonderful discipline for focusing a writer’s mind on making every word count. The trouble is, that I attempted to apply this same discipline to the whole of my last novel, so it took far too long to write!

      Like

  11. chilling!! Well done Sarah!!

    Liked by 1 person

  12. Your prose grounds us to this mysterious place. Well done.

    Liked by 1 person

  13. OOOhh, this gave me the shivers. Loved the imagery and the ending was unexpected!

    Liked by 1 person

Please comment, whatever your planet of origin.

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: