Walk between showers
No petals underfoot yet
Fuchsia sparkles
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Today, I’ve written a haiku without punctuation. This is less usual for me, but I’m mindful that in my recent poll a percentage of people expressed their preference for this type of haiku.
I agree it works better here, as the haiku is about a walk, with forward momentum and no lingering: the steady rhythm of footfalls on the pavement as the person catches the good weather between showers.
With regard to haiku that calls for punctuation, I think that my blogging friend Leigh W. Smith sums it up well (to part-quote her here): “punctuation simply helps me to know where you, as an author, wanted the breath to be taken, a pregnant pause to be felt, a full stop to slow me down”.
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Sarah Potter Writes 
such loveliness! kudos~
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Thank you, Cindy 🙂
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Lovely haiku for the beautiful fuchsia. Mine are still in full bloom and never actually died away last winter it was so mild. I can see that not using commas here definitely worked better for the ‘walk’ theme and that is a great quote at the end, for times when the comma is needed. Excellently said 🙂
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Yes, I have a fuchsia that never died away last year. It’s in a pot outside my back door, along with some other pots with begonias and geraniums in them. None of these died, either.
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Same…I left them out all winter and they all survived. I’ll do the same this year but who knows what will happen. Frost? Snow? Snow? Ice? Rain? We take our chances these days 😉
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This is lovely, Sarah. Gorgeous image too. 🙂
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Thank you, Sylvia 🙂
I took some pictures of other rain-sparkled plants that day, which I’ll post at a later date along with a suitable haiku.
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thank you for that explanation!! Beautiful!
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Thank you for your “thank you” 🙂
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Good point from Leigh. Haiku is lovely. The walk feels refreshing.
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It was a most refreshing walk. I’m so glad you loved my haiku. Thank you.
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There’s a freedom to not having punctuation, isn’t there? 🙂
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I have a whole section in my latest novel, where one of the characters hasn’t taken his anti-psychotic medication and so his thoughts have no punctuation! It was great fun to write.
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