Monday Morning #Haiku 35 — Fuchsia

Fuchsia in Rain

Walk between showers
No petals underfoot yet
Fuchsia sparkles

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Today, I’ve written a haiku without punctuation. This is less usual for me, but I’m mindful that in my recent poll a percentage of people expressed their preference for this type of haiku.

I agree it works better here, as the haiku is about a walk, with forward momentum and no lingering: the steady rhythm of footfalls on the pavement as the person catches the good weather between showers.

With regard to haiku that calls for punctuation, I think that my blogging friend Leigh W. SmithΒ  sums it up well (to part-quote her here): “punctuation simply helps me to know where you, as an author, wanted the breath to be taken, a pregnant pause to be felt, a full stop to slow me down”.

Author: Sarah Potter Writes

Sarah is a British eccentric who writes offbeat fiction, haiku and tanka poetry. She's into nature, gardening, and natural health. For her, sociability is something that happens in short bursts with long breathing spaces in between.

13 thoughts on “Monday Morning #Haiku 35 — Fuchsia”

  1. Lovely haiku for the beautiful fuchsia. Mine are still in full bloom and never actually died away last winter it was so mild. I can see that not using commas here definitely worked better for the ‘walk’ theme and that is a great quote at the end, for times when the comma is needed. Excellently said πŸ™‚

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      1. Same…I left them out all winter and they all survived. I’ll do the same this year but who knows what will happen. Frost? Snow? Snow? Ice? Rain? We take our chances these days πŸ˜‰

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