Genre: Alternative Fairytale
Word count: 100
In the forest lived a family of grizzly bears.
Goldie “daredevil” Locks was an 8-year-old tomboy who’d recently chopped off her blonde curls with a hacksaw blade. She lived in a lakeside shack with her father, not far from the bears’ den.
After Pa had forgotten to feed her for the umpteenth time, she stole his chair when he was drunk and set it up in the lake to do a spot of fishing. She hated fish, but reckoned on trading her catch with the bears for some honey.
That day they feasted upon fish, followed by Goldie honey pudding.
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Friday Fictioneers: 100 word stories
Photo Prompt: copyright © Ted Strutz
I loved the title. The story is a warning against taking tales seriously. Since it’s a tale itself, I won’t take the warning seriously
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Thanks. I love your comment, although many fairytales are sometimes based on myths which can having their grounding in truth. So you never know…
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I like the thought of never knowing.
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Dear Sarah,
Oh…a rather grisly take on the old favorite, or grizzly take. Goldie honey pudding? It doesn’t sound like the bears were much for trading. It’s also a sadly realistic tale in some ways, isn’t it? Well turned.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Thanks. Am glad you liked the turning.
Believe it or not, I do like bears but wouldn’t dream of trading with them. They say to never carry snicker bars with you when camping in places where bears live. They will rip your tent to pieces to get at those chocolate delights!
Interestingly, I read that bears prefer to eat immature bees, but will eat honey instead, if there are not enough of them available.
All best wishes
Sarah
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Oh dear! Count on you to have Goldie turned to honey pudding! Takes fairy tale to a whole ‘nother level!
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Hee-hee 😀 I just can’t help it.
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Thank goodness!!
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Good fun, Sarah! I like these little fiction pieces. I’m so long-winded I probably couldn’t write one, but I do enjoy your efforts.
Have a brilliant weekend, my talented friend.
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Thanks, Bill. I bet you could write one. From reading the opening to your latest novel on “Look Inside” on Amazon, I would say that your writing isn’t in the least long-winded but quite disciplined and punchy. If I can write novels anywhere between 60-100K in length and write flash fiction, so can you. It has helped my writing tremendously the discipline of flash fiction. Have a look what bestselling author Louise Jensen has to say on the subject. As you can see, she’s a Friday Fictioneer and she got to No.1 in the Kindle charts with both of her novels. https://fabricatingfiction.wordpress.com/2017/02/07/how-writing-flash-fiction-helped-me-write-a-novel/
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Hahahahahaha! This was great! The old joke is Goldilocks was a nymphomaniac because she liked sleeping in other people’s beds.
Five out of five versions of where the papa bear comes home alone. 😀
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Thanks, Kent 🙂 The only sleep that my Goldilocks got, was the sleep of death, so she never got the chance to grow up and become a nymphomaniac!
As far a papa bear coming home alone, I believe that they hire out bear suits for certain sorts of adult games that I’ll not detail on my blog. Please note that my comment is not based on experience but hearsay. …There’s naught stranger than folk.
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😀 😀 😀
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Many fairy tales have gruesome endings in their original form. Maybe this is the real story, after all 🙂
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Yes, you’re right about that. I think some of them had gruesome endings to scare children into behaving.
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Yes. And some simply reflected the values and cultures of the times. Pretty harsh.
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Enjoyed the evil twist on the nursery rhyme. Not a version I will share with the kids until they’re a bit older!
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No Little Red Riding Hood for them either. That wolf gave me nightmares as a young child. Once, when I had a high fever, I hallucinated it standing my my bed, its eyes glowing in the dark, its mouth salivating, and its teeth ready to eat me. I could even smell its bad breath and feel the heat of it on my face. I couldn’t sleep with the light off for ages after that experience.
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Eeek! Moral of this tale: Never try to make deals with bears.
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…apart from offering them your backpack full of Snicker bars in lieu of them eating you!
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Oh so the bears finally got fed up with her stealing their porridge, sitting in their chairs. Can’t say sh didn’t have it coming.
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I’d get very fed up if someone kept stealing my porridge, after I’d gone to all the trouble of making it, especially once I’d spooned my honey on top!
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That girl was trouble from day one. I bet if you’d had more than 100 words we would have learned how she tried to cheat the bears, or kidnap baby bear (Cubby) and hold him hostage.
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I reckon you’re right there. Just think what she would have been like as a teenager, if she’d lived that long, considering she was already 8 going on 18 when she got eaten by the bears.
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A failed entrepreneur, big-time! Still, as long as the bears didn’t go hungry… Nice take.
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I guess entrepreneurs are in the market for taking big risks. We will never know if she was a female version of Richard Branson in the making D:
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I loved this re-working of an old classic!
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Thank you, so much. I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Nasty bears, I hope they had indigestion 🙂
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…the worst indigestion, to stop them eating any more young girls!
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Hehe…goldie honey pudding. What a fun re-do of a classic. I love doing that, too. 🙂
Great storytelling, too – you’re great at it!
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Thank you, Cynthia 🙂 This is only my second attempt at a re-do of a classic. I wrote a longer story called Rupert Wilt-skin, based on Rumplestiltskin. It revolved around a crime boss! Which ones have you done?
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Haha…I never did like the simpering, original Goldilocks! I like this one much better! Love it…your’re great at these flashes with a dark twist Sarah, just brilliant 🙂 xxxx
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I’m glad you enjoyed it, Sherri. She was quite irritating, the original Goldilocks, but I think she lived a bit longer 😉 xxxx
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