‘It’s just a stage he’s going through,’ she says to the other mothers. ‘Yesterday, he ate two earthworms, an earwig, and the dog’s dinner.’
‘Mum. Look. Tasty lolly.’ He plucks the mouldy seed pod by its stem from the path and stuffs it in his mouth.
Long silence. Delayed reaction. Family mutt slinks off under the park bench, trembling. Mum moves in slow motion towards her son, through a force field of invisible treacle.
Ploff. An explosion of spores.
One nappy draped over tree branch. No more toddler. Just a furry grey monster toddling off into the bushes, ploffing with delight.
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Picture Prompt courtesy of Kent Bonham
Friday Fictioneers — 100 word stories
Lovely and original take on the prompt.
Claire
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Thanks, Claire 🙂
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Lovely, Disgust for one but delicious for others!
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Hee, hee, hee. Glad you enjoyed it, Elizabeth.
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FLAT OUT NASTY!
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Dave, I blame it on reading too much Roald Dahl to my children and my parents having given me the Victorian Moral Tales ‘Struwwelpeter’ (Shockheaded Peter) for my 8th birthday! If in doubt, blame it on the parents.
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Dear Sarah,
That was certainly an unexpected ending. How will mum explain this to the other mothers? Clever and entertaining.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Thanks. The ending even took me by surprise!
I think mothers of naughty children often find themselves explaining things to other mothers. My daughter used to require a great deal of explaining, especially when she grabbed the bottom box of eggs stacked high in a crowded supermarket with cataclysmic results! She also had a friend who liked eating earthworms.
All best wishes
Sarah
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Dear Sarah,
This was pure Horse Badorties as a toddler. (William Kotzwinkle, The Fan Man) Look it up, you’ll enjoy it.
Aloha,
Doug
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Dear Doug,
That is one weird stream-of-consciousness story. Just looked it up. And there was me thinking my writing was strange. Nothing in comparison to Mr Kotzwinkle’s little gem.Thanks for the recommendation. The Fan Man is now on my reading list.
All best wishes
Sarah
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oh well done, very well done! I love the word ploffing! Roald Dahl would be proud of you.
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Thank you, Joss. I adore inventing words. Roald Dahl was the best, and I’m so glad his writing is so popular with children, even though he’s no longer with us.
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He was, and still is, a favourite in our home along with Shel Silverstein.
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Oh my goodness! That’s so scary. 🙂
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Ooooo dear, Sylvia. I didn’t mean to scare you 😉
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Love it! Great ending.
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Thanks, Andrea. I’m really enjoying Friday Fictioneers and am finding it quite addictive. Have been so absorbed with editing and submitting lately, that I haven’t been writing anything new, so thought a bit of weekly flash fiction from a photo prompt was a great opportunity to keep my writing muscles exercised. It’s also fascinating to read the huge variety of stories that the prompts trigger in others.
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marvelously macabre dear Sarah!!!
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I tend to have a dark sense of humour in my writing, while in “real” life, I find the most lighthearted things funny — usually related to my dog doing something silly.
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I like the added touch of the family mutt hiding. Well executed story.
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Thank you. As much as I love them, dogs can be terrible cowards at times.
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I just love the image of that little monster toddling off, so self-satisfied, after the high drama of the slow motion ‘treacle’ moment. And ‘ploffing’ is wonderful. A great story.
Cheers
Marg
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Thank you, Marg. I think that toddlers are very funny when they run off fast on their tiny plump legs, more often than not when they’re being naughty!
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You do these short pieces so well, Sarah. And brilliant to learn a new word: ploffing. Nice one!
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Ploffing is a complete invention, as is the word “ploff” from which it’s derived. I thought, what noise would best describe an exploding seed pod and that word popped into my head.
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Nice. Short sentences did this story justice.
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Thank you 🙂
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Delightful and original, really enjoyed your story.
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My huge apologies for not thanking you for your kind comment until now, but it went into my spam and I’ve only just found it.
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