Summer breeze catches
party balloons on a gate:
a hint of thunder.
Sticky kids crammed in marquee
with one useless magician.
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Sarah Potter Writes 
Fabulous.
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Thanks 🙂 I thought to follow your example of a little piece mentioning sticky children at parties. As you can see, this is my very first tanka.
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I am impressed. I assume you know there is a tradition of following on by another monk writing another haiku?
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I don’t know about this thing about monks. Do tell me more.
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Wonderful, as always, Sarah!
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Thank you, Naomi. You are very kind 🙂
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Sweet and visual. Nice write.
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Thank you 🙂
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Yes! Though not completely useless for he can make smiles disappear with but a wave of his magic wand, fashioned from the finest underarm hair.
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I guess under such circumstances, there’ll be the holding of noses, too, as the wizard’s wand probably whiffs a little 😉
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delightful, Sarah!
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Thank you, Francina 🙂
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oh THAT is clever! ..though the picture makes it more obvious…I don’t know much about tanka but this is…magic! The useless magician with his magic wand…the storm brewing…
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The middle line of a tanka is meant to act as a pivot between the first two lines and the last two — hence the thunder. I think this form encourages playfulness.
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Yes – but you set the bar too high…bit of a challenge!
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It’s possibly one of occasions when the writer knows what she’s thinking, but to others she’s being abstruse. I’ve just penned another tanka, having been inspired by something I found moving this morning. I’ll post it soon, but as for whether I’ve lowered the bar enough, we’ll see!
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Yes – but you set the bar too high…bit of a challenge!
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